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CCA APP questions
ok, I know that the APP process is now closed, but I have a question, looking at the applicants who recently got in, one of them got in when they had a similar Character backgroud issue as I did, why did he get in but not me? and why do I need more than 20 lines? My first app denial said nothing about me needing more lines, just that it was a little confusing, and I was told that my back-story was OK for 5 lines, but just needed to add a little more detail and be a little more descriptive. is there something that I'm not being told? sorry if I sound annoying but, i'm just blowing off some steam, not to mention, confused.
Chris10023- Posts : 7
Join date : 2012-06-15
Re: CCA APP questions
Did you get anymore negatives in your APP?
[SoTA]G-Man- Posts : 61
Join date : 2012-05-21
Age : 26
Location : Michigan
Re: CCA APP questions
In these types of situations, its best to ask an administrator directly.
But, since I am on, I shall try my best to inform you of what you need to work on to get the satisfaction of getting an app accepted.
Your RP examples were abit shabby. "/me patrols" is not alot of detail for a single line. Add more to it next time, like this: "/me patrols down the empty street holding a stunstick firmly in my hand." then follow up with "/it At the end of the street there is a man attempting to get into D6" and so on... Instead of splitting single movements into diffrent lines, try adding them together. this will result in more detail, and a more compelling story. And try to make it a story, not a simple event. Ide suggest removing the first part, with the can? It isnt really needed.
The background story is decent, but also needs more. Go deep into your characters story, not just "I was chased by bullies". Try turning that one line into a big part of his childhood. Explain what happend, why it happend, and where, and of course the result of this. (IE: The characters attributes that were impoved from this event.) As the story continues and you move into the adult stage, explain what he had to go through during the combine invasion, and/or his life so far in the city. Go into friends and family, all that jazz. And I promise you, if you improve on these and develope your character more, and increase the amount of story to him, you will get results.
And also, the admins know what they are doing. If you didnt get accepted, use it as a learning example. Now you know what you need to work on. And if you do work on those things, you will get admins attention in your next app.
But, since I am on, I shall try my best to inform you of what you need to work on to get the satisfaction of getting an app accepted.
Your RP examples were abit shabby. "/me patrols" is not alot of detail for a single line. Add more to it next time, like this: "/me patrols down the empty street holding a stunstick firmly in my hand." then follow up with "/it At the end of the street there is a man attempting to get into D6" and so on... Instead of splitting single movements into diffrent lines, try adding them together. this will result in more detail, and a more compelling story. And try to make it a story, not a simple event. Ide suggest removing the first part, with the can? It isnt really needed.
The background story is decent, but also needs more. Go deep into your characters story, not just "I was chased by bullies". Try turning that one line into a big part of his childhood. Explain what happend, why it happend, and where, and of course the result of this. (IE: The characters attributes that were impoved from this event.) As the story continues and you move into the adult stage, explain what he had to go through during the combine invasion, and/or his life so far in the city. Go into friends and family, all that jazz. And I promise you, if you improve on these and develope your character more, and increase the amount of story to him, you will get results.
And also, the admins know what they are doing. If you didnt get accepted, use it as a learning example. Now you know what you need to work on. And if you do work on those things, you will get admins attention in your next app.
DIABLO258- Posts : 295
Join date : 2012-06-07
Age : 28
Location : Minnesota
Re: CCA APP questions
Nice work Diablo nice tips for the denied
[SoTA]G-Man- Posts : 61
Join date : 2012-05-21
Age : 26
Location : Michigan
Re: CCA APP questions
DIABLO258 wrote:In these types of situations, its best to ask an administrator directly.
But, since I am on, I shall try my best to inform you of what you need to work on to get the satisfaction of getting an app accepted.
Your RP examples were abit shabby. "/me patrols" is not alot of detail for a single line. Add more to it next time, like this: "/me patrols down the empty street holding a stunstick firmly in my hand." then follow up with "/it At the end of the street there is a man attempting to get into D6" and so on... Instead of splitting single movements into diffrent lines, try adding them together. this will result in more detail, and a more compelling story. And try to make it a story, not a simple event. Ide suggest removing the first part, with the can? It isnt really needed.
The background story is decent, but also needs more. Go deep into your characters story, not just "I was chased by bullies". Try turning that one line into a big part of his childhood. Explain what happend, why it happend, and where, and of course the result of this. (IE: The characters attributes that were impoved from this event.) As the story continues and you move into the adult stage, explain what he had to go through during the combine invasion, and/or his life so far in the city. Go into friends and family, all that jazz. And I promise you, if you improve on these and develope your character more, and increase the amount of story to him, you will get results.
And also, the admins know what they are doing. If you didnt get accepted, use it as a learning example. Now you know what you need to work on. And if you do work on those things, you will get admins attention in your next app.
thanks diablo, I know that the Admins know what they're doing, I was just confused by a few things.
Chris10023- Posts : 7
Join date : 2012-06-15
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